T2+narrative

[|T2 Narrative Writing.]
__Wednesday 28 June 2011__

**Comment: Good idea for a story Quinn, I imagine this is something that boys would really enjoy doing.**

**Target - Next Steps** **1. Describe the different parts of the story, rather than listing events that are happening e.g. Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo flip, racing down the steep end of the ramp with everything he had before biking up the other side and lifting off into the air and somersaulting, then landing safely back on the ramp.** **2. Use consistent and correct punctuation for dialogue.**

“hey James we should make our own park and ramps”said Nick. “I don’t think thats a good idea because I don’t have any materials to make it and besides my mum would freak if I Tell her” said James.

Dialogue can look different in different stories, choose one way and use it throughout your writing.

Story. One day two people named Nick and James Were at a bike park practicing their tricks.Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo and James was having trouble to land his 360 back flip. “hey James we should make our own park and ramps” said Nick “I don’t think thats a good idea because I don’t have any materials to make it and besides my mum would freak if I Tell her” said James “come on think about it my dad chops down trees for his job,so maybe we might be able to get wood of him” said Nick “My mum would still kill me because she dues not want ramps in her lawn” “Well try at my house, see what happens” said James So they both walked together into Nicks house. They were at the front door they Nick rang the door bell. ding dong ding dong, dong, dong. Nicks father Bill assured the door. Nick said to his dad if they could make a bike track somewhere. Bill didn’t look very happy but he did have a idea. He said we could make it behind the house because they have huge space. So Bill suggested they built it there. Nick said “dad would be able to get some wood” Bill raised his left eyebrow and tilted his head. “you boys are old enough” said Bill. “ill be back in a bit.” He went into his garage and took some equipment out. “Here” said Bill, “use this.” Bill handed us some axes and saws. “use this cut some wood down behind out house to make space and then work from there. Nick and I took the axes of Bill and went around his house. On the way they saw people with leather jackets and glasses and huge mussels tagging on our fence. OI I said. They all looked at us and ran away. They both ran to see what they started. It looked like a half finished word, It looked like it was suppose to to say looser. “eghh” James said “can we go these tools are making my arms extremely saw.” So Nick and James ran quickly to the back of the house and started to chop trees down. We got our gear ready James and Nick raised there axes then they started to chop. The day is almost over and about 4 hours of hard work they headed back home with their wood and equipment. They dropped of the axes and things and then they started to get the trees one by one and stock them into the garage. Fianily we got all the logs. We rushed to Bill and told him we are ready to start the ramps. “Are you serious its 7 o'clock we will do it tomorrow” said bill. So Nick wonderd of to to his house. So Jane said “what did you do today Nick” “We went to James’s back yard and choped some trees, And tommrow we are going to make bike ramps behind his house” Nick said “Sounds like fun” Jane said Nick ate all up his dinner and wondered of to bed. The next It was Sunday. Nick woke up from his bed He got up and opened his curtains. What a sunny day Nick thought. He wondered of down stars and grabbed some breakfast and he went to the phone and rang James. Ring ring, ring ring “Hello James speaking” “Hi its Nick, I was wondering when we are going to get back to the ramps” “Oh come over any time Im ready when you are” said james “ill be over in 5 minutes ok” Said Nick “ok see you in five” Said James “bye” “bye” Nick got his gear and left. After he Went out the door he said “bye mum” in a loud voice I walked over to Nicks house, Its only next door. I walk up his house and rang the door bell ding dong ding dong, dong, dong.Nick aweserd the door. “Ready to start” said James “You bet, Lets get started” said Nick James and Nick went to his dad and said are you ready. “This is going to take a few hours or so but yes im ready” said Bill He got his tools and started working.This might take a while lets sread it at the bike tracks next to our school. They get their bikes and left saying bye mum. They were at the park like yesterday practicing their tricks. Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo and James Had another go with his 360 back flip. He takes a deep breath and heads twards the ramp. He jumps and dues a 360 back flip!!! He just landed the trick he was extreamly amazed that what he has just done. He gave Nick the hardest hi five he has ever done he got off his bike and started running around. about 2 houres later they began to start to head home to see if Bill has finished or not. They got home and said to Bill “is the ramps done yet” said Nick “Yes they are ready to put up” said Bill. He hands James and I nail guns and nails.

__Friday 24 June 2011__

Story.

One day two people named Nick and James Were at a bike park practicing their tricks.Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo and James was having trouble to land his 360 back flip.

“hey James we should make our own park and ramps” said Nick

“I don’t think thats a good idea because I don’t have any materials to make it and besides my mum would freak if I Tell her” said James

“come on think about it my dad chops down trees for his job,so maybe we might be able to get wood of him” said Nick

“My mum would still kill me because she dues not want ramps in her lawn” “Well try at my house, see what happens” said James

So they both walked together into Nicks house. They were at the front door they Nick rang the door bell. ding dong ding dong, dong, dong. Nicks father Bill assured the door. Nick said to his dad if they could make a bike track somewhere. Bill didn’t look very happy but he did have a idea. He said we could make it behind the house because they have huge space. So Bill suggested they built it there. Nick said “dad would be able to get some wood” Bill raised his left eyebrow and tilted his head. “you boys are old enough” said Bill. “ill be back in a bit.” He went into his garage and took some equipment out. “Here” said Bill, “use this.” Bill handed us some axes and saws. “use this cut some wood down behind out house to make space and then work from there. Nick and I took the axes of Bill and went around his house.

On the way they saw people with leather jackets and glasses and huge mussels tagging on our fence. OI I said. They all looked at us and ran away. They both ran to see what they started. It looked like a half finished word, It looked like it was suppose to to say looser.

“eghh” James said “can we go these tools are making my arms extremely saw.” So Nick and James ran quickly to the back of the house and started to chop trees down. We got our gear ready James and Nick raised there axes then they started to chop. The day is almost over and about 4 hours of hard work they headed back home with their wood and equipment. They dropped of the axes and things and then they started to get the trees one by one.

__Thuresday 23 June 2011__

Story.

One day two people named Nick and James Were at a bike park practicing their tricks.Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo and James was having trouble to land his 360 back flip. “hey James we should make our own park and ramps” said Nick “I dont think thats a good ider because I dont have any materials to make it and besides my mum would freak if I Tell her” said James “come on think about it my dad chops down trees for his job,so maby we might be able to get wood of him” “My mum would still kill me bacause she duesent want ramps in her lawn” “Well try at my house, see what happends”

So they both walked together into Nicks house. They were at the front door they Nick rang the door bell. ding dong ding dong, dong, dong. Nicks father Bill awserd the door. Nick said to his dad if they could make a bike track somewhere. Bill dident look verry happy but he did have a ider. He said we could make it behind the house because they have huge space. So Bill suggested they built it there. Nick said “dad will you be able to get some wood for us please."

__Wednesday 22 June 2011__

Story.

One day two people named Nick and James Were at a bike park practicing their tricks.Nick was practicing his 360 flamingo and James was having trouble to land his 360 back flip. “hey James we should make our own park and ramps” said Nick “I dont think thats a good ider because I dont have any materials to make it and besides my mum would freak if I Tell her” said James “come on think about it my dad chops down trees for his job,so maby we might be able to get wood of him” “My mum would still kill me bacause she duesent want ramps in her lawn”